It was day I was in a boat going to a small island. There was lots of water and seals. When I got there I grabbed my bike and got on the island I started to bike.
I had to do lots of jumps because there were lots of rocks and boulders. I was doing lots of tricks. I was going up hill now so it was hard. When I got up the hill it was high and there were lots of rocks to get past but I was up to the challenge. Bump bump. It was hard but I was doing it.
When I got down There was a gate so I did a flip over it and that was really hard. I kept doing tricks and jumping over things like rocks. I went to the highest mountain on the Island and it was funky. I almost fall but I didn’t. It was really high but I was going to take the risk and go down fast!
I was going down fast but it was not stopping me. I bumped so much and it did not feel good it was covered in grass but it was still rocky. I got down to the ground it felt amazing.
Good Work Jasper, Jasper I liked when you added more info like what it was called and more. Jasper on the 2 or 3 paragraph you said hill but you had to pot a hill. For the next step can you maybe make the writing bigger that the next step. Tom Out
ReplyDeleteHi Jasper I really like your writing. But maybe next time you can put facts at the top of your writing. Also you can fix some mistakes on your blog post and put a W.A.L.T up.
ReplyDeleteHi Jasper I like how you told us that the track was bumpy.Next time you could make your writing bigger and fix some mistakes. Good work Jasper.
ReplyDeleteMy name is Nikoli from Yaldhurst model school. I really like your post because you said how you felt.
ReplyDeleteIt reminds me of my dad's bike rides he did before I was born.
Maybe next time you could add more similes.
How long was the bike ride?