The present

In the past weeks our class (Ako Ngatahi) were writing a short story about a video titled “The Present”. It was a story about a boy who got a present and it was a puppy. After he discovered that the puppy only had three legs.

Here is the video.

“The Present”

W.A.L.T: Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

The present

I was playing video games on my xbox 360 when my mum came in and gave me a box. I opened the present. There was a puppy. Wow, I thought. But then I saw it had 3 legs. “Get lost” I said.
I was annoyed that my mum got me a puppy that had 3 legs just because I was missing part of my leg! It was creamy brown and white but it only had 3 legs and I had 1 leg.   

The dog did a silly thing. So I kicked it. Then it was being silly. How could I not love the puppy? It was being silly. So I started to like it, but I was playing video games again. After a while of him trying to play with me I decided to go outside with him. So I said “I’ll be outside mum.” Then I went and played outside with the puppy. I hope we are best friends forever! I wish I was never mean to the puppy. I think the puppy loves me.

The End